I thought the film seemed a bit lengthy with too many characters and I wanted to find ways to cut it down so that I can focus more on the animation. So, here are some potential ways I can change the story.
- Cut beginning and start at the grocery store with Lynn already upset as her father leaves to go into the store
- Quick flashback type of thing while Lynn is calling animal shelters (car stopping in front of the dog, car passing the dog, close up on the dog's eyes)
- Lynn angrily throws her phone when no one answers her calls
- Dad returns to a still angry Lynn
- Lynn asks what that smell is because Dad had bought dog treats while in the store
- Conversation continues on their drive back home until Lynn grabs the treats and sprints out of the car in search of the dog
- After some running around and searching, the dog emerges from the tree line
- Lynn makes eye contact with the animal once more and places a treat down on the ground in front of her and takes a few steps back
- The animal slowly approaches the treat but passes it and walks straight to Lynn, while Dad arrives and tries to pull Lynn back until he sees the moment between them
- Dog wagging his tail in Lynn's arms
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